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Sunku 6

Submitted by lonlyhrtsclub13 on Sun, 2018-02-25 17:23

Muse of my muse
Come hither
Awaken

Purple clouds
Dark tide
Rolling in

Hold me
Shake thoughts
Restless head

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form

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IRiz

Sun, 2018-02-25 17:27

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Sounds like a beginning of a Greek Tragedy.

IRiz

lonlyhrtsclub13

Sun, 2018-02-25 17:28

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Doesn't it....could be some future storytelling now that I can post again.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

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weirdelf

Mon, 2018-02-26 23:05

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3 verses, each verse 2/3/4 syllables. But very good
https://vocaroo.com/i/s1rfYBZ9xeQ8

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