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Stubborn Heart

Submitted by Juin Deveraux on Wed, 2011-01-26 15:37

Sometimes when my stubborn heart gets a little blue
I take her away from everything about you
I pour her a drink and take her in my arms
where her tears can roll free, away from judgement or harm

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mand

Wed, 2011-01-26 15:48

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I like this clever poem. I love the third line - I think I'll do that for my heart, sounds like good therapy.

Excellent

Love Mand xxxxxx

scribbler

Wed, 2011-01-26 22:23

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I think this is your 1st posting here.Welcome to the site.I always marvel at the way some writers can pack so much into so few words.Looking forward to more of your writing.............scribbler

Juin Deveraux

Mon, 2011-01-31 19:11

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I am quite flattered by the feedback. Thank you very much.

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