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Stubborn Heart
Sometimes when my stubborn heart gets a little blue
I take her away from everything about you
I pour her a drink and take her in my arms
where her tears can roll free, away from judgement or harm
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Comments
mand
Wed, 2011-01-26 15:48
Hi Juin
I like this clever poem. I love the third line - I think I'll do that for my heart, sounds like good therapy.
Excellent
Love Mand xxxxxx
scribbler
Wed, 2011-01-26 22:23
heart
I think this is your 1st posting here.Welcome to the site.I always marvel at the way some writers can pack so much into so few words.Looking forward to more of your writing.............scribbler
Juin Deveraux
Mon, 2011-01-31 19:11
Thank you!
I am quite flattered by the feedback. Thank you very much.