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Stress Relief Doctor's visit
No painkiller can bring relief,
No psychologist expresses belief,
Though it's in the back of my mind,
An enemy stabbing from behind,
No justice for this unfair crime,
No compensation for the time,
Lost to sleepless nights,
Fear of bright lights,
Tears at upsetting sights,
Those feelings of unrest,
I’m not at my best,
Yet being put to the test,
By this invisible threat,
Whose anguish I cannot forget,
With every return, I face regret,
Having me in disbelief,
Doc, this agony will not be brief,
Please, prescribe me some stress relief.
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Free verse
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-09-25 04:50
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Stress Relief Doctor's visit" effectively conveys the speaker's experience of chronic stress and their plea for relief. The use of concise and straightforward language helps to create a sense of urgency and frustration. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened:
1. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery to enhance the reader's understanding of the speaker's experience. For example, instead of simply stating "An enemy stabbing from behind," consider using descriptive language to paint a more visceral picture.
2. Structure and rhythm: While the poem maintains a consistent rhyme scheme, the rhythm feels a bit uneven in places. Consider revisiting the meter and syllable count to ensure a smoother flow throughout the poem.
3. Emotional depth: While the poem effectively conveys the speaker's frustration and desire for relief, it could benefit from further exploration of the emotional impact of chronic stress. Consider delving deeper into the speaker's feelings of helplessness, despair,
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Lavender
Tue, 2023-09-26 13:27
Stress Relief...
Hello, Credell,
I felt the strong anxiety within this poem, and the frustration. Reminds me a bit of Billy Joel's "We Didn't Start The Fire" with its fast pace. At some point in our lives, we can all relate to this poem. I look forward to reading more of your work!
Thank you,
Lavender