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Ghost of Me
I am your divine motivation,
Incensed, the only white ghost you sense daily,
The invisible sharpness of pain you feel thinking of me;
Triggered by the sudden death of my social media presence;
Imagination haunted;
Longing escapes into the graveyard;
Together with prayers of resurrection.
I am your buried treasure in the movie of life;
Dualism coveted--
my invisible citizenship on earth, and -
Roaming free with ghosts in another universe,
distanced from you, was it by choice?
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Free verse
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Thu, 2023-09-21 22:00
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Ghost of Me" explores the theme of absence and longing through the metaphor of a ghost. The imagery and metaphors used effectively convey the speaker's sense of being both present and absent in the lives of others. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened.
Firstly, the poem could benefit from more specific and concrete language. For example, phrases like "divine motivation" and "invisible sharpness of pain" are somewhat abstract and could be made more vivid by providing specific details or examples. This would help to ground the poem in a more tangible reality and make the emotions and experiences described more relatable to the reader.
Additionally, the poem could explore the theme of absence and longing in more depth. While the concept of the speaker being absent from social media is intriguing, it would be interesting to see a deeper exploration of the reasons behind this absence and the impact it has on the speaker and those around them. This could add more complexity and emotional depth to
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