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Specters at Violet Dusk

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Fri, 2022-07-22 05:30

We orbit each other like binary stars
Both shining so brightly
Occasionally casting shadows
Impressing upon each other
Over cosmic distances, doubly bright
We appear as one star
Wished upon at violet dusk
Cherished by some unknowing observers
Wayward souls married by time
Joined by tired, inviting hands
Attempting to heal the ghosts of old
Specters who still exist shuttered
In attics of the distant past

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Free verse
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Ten days of structure makes Tim a dull boy. Some free verse for my wife. The premise here is the two binary stars are married to each other by gravity. To the distant observer (a pair of lovers wishing on a star(s) they appear as one star. Upon closer a look one would see them taking alternating turns at the observer’s foreground. At this point the star brightness actually decreases as you’re having the other blocked or eclipsed by the double.
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Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2022-07-22 08:42

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(concerning your last few words...) I just love when you talk dirty! LOL! but seriously, thanks for the information. ny husband, Steven would call you "a Jack of all trades" the poem is lovely. my favorite lines are:

Cherished by some unknowing observers
Wayward souls married by time

(you are a romantic!)
*hugs, Cat

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Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-07-22 10:21

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I slipped this into her day bag on a card with an ink sketch of a guitar with the inscription “our love is one that people wish on stars to have.” with a giant bag of home popped popcorn (that’s part of our love language). She’s going to have a blast. I’m going to try and hold it down at home with the kids all weekend. Fingers have been crossed.

You are all awesome,
Tim

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Geezer

Fri, 2022-07-22 09:39

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thought that you were describing photos packed away in the attic. [Specters who still exist shuttered
. in attics of the distant past].
However, I thoroughly enjoyed your explanation. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Sat, 2022-07-23 01:05

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Always makes me dull, however, I think this color challenge has really brought out the best in us. I enjoyed your poem as well as your explanation.

~RoseBlack~

Brian W Taylor

Mon, 2022-07-25 18:13

I love space imagery and your use of it to explain attraction is quite good. I want more. Hahaha! I have some 'space' stuff too by the way. Cheers!

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