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The Sky has no Limit
Swimming, swimming, swimming in clouds,
The soft, plump, snowy white rounds
Of large and small and all different shapes,
The white fluffy cotton balls shaded opaque.
Where the sky meets it’s limit b’tween soil and stars,
Is where I lie in the blue, that’s my path.
And there I follow the orbit’s flow
For gravity doesn’t exist in this zone.
And I row and row in the milky horizon,
Wondering what has been seen with my eyes and
How I came to be up so high.
The heavens so close that I could cry
From the beautiful shine that they lay upon us.
A gleam, a twinkle, each one’s marvellous.
As the moon tucks aways and declares its goodnight
A star beams down with its sun-kissed light.
The sun turns o’er a new day for the world,
Yet still I fly like a majestic bird.
With the wind on my back and my arms out wide
I soar through the clouds without care o’ any kind.
The world is my canvas, I float in the air,
I can do as I please and go anywhere, for
The sky has no limit and is within reach,
Even for those with the smallest of dreams.
Swimming, swimming, swimming in clouds,
The soft, plump, snowy white rounds
Of large and small and all different shapes,
The white fluffy cotton balls shaded––
I awake.
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-10-06 06:41
A dream
To live is to dream young poet. Welcome to the site. I love your poem. I can tell you’re a musician. Where I see some lines that don’t rhyme I’m not sure if it is a free verse poem. It’s structured pretty tightly in the rhythm department.
The idea that it was all a dream you experienced is super. What a great twist at the and. Made me smile for sure.
Welcome to the site and keep writing. You’re very good.
Tim
Geezer
Thu, 2022-10-06 09:47
Yes...
Although this has shades of rhyme
I agree that it is a good free verse.
As I am primarily a rhymer, I found the element of rhyme
being thrown in as the last two lines for some verses
then switching to the first two lines and finally no rhyme at all
a little disconcerting, but I will agree, that the overall poem
is well done. Welcome to Neo.
~ Geezer.
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Lavender
Thu, 2022-10-06 10:16
The Sky Has No Limit,
Welcome, Lexi-loo!
As I was reading, I felt the sensation of soaring and taking flight. It's a meditative piece, bringing peaceful sentiments. I agree that the ending was unexpected and a bit of a nice twist. Beautiful poetry!
Lavender