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Reflections

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Wed, 2022-08-17 20:33

I love you, your fire, your spirit

I know what lives inside you

A wellspring of love and compassion
Reserved for a deserving few


I gaze into the sacred pool

Where I could live a thousand years

Guarded secrets of your soul

I see my own reflections there

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For a friend of mine who, like myself, internalizes. I am one of the few confidants that gets to see inside. It’s a very special gift.
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-08-18 11:30

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is a special person indeed! We all need someone like this in our lives. Reflections is a good title for this one. The piece is short and to the point; without wandering off into the meandering abyss of maudlin, sentimental crap. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Sat, 2022-08-20 08:51

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Simple and to the point! A bond like this is rare and should be treasured. Nice job reflecting on such a relationship!

~RoseBlack~

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