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Rebirth

Submitted by Lavender on Sat, 2020-06-13 18:48

I felt a war inside, so
I battled my way inward
to confront my foe.

I felt anger inside, so
I held up fists
to defend my ego.

I felt suffering inside, so
I held onto my heart
to ease the grief.

I felt ignorance inside, so
I sat down and shut my mouth
to quiet the chaos.

I love
I love
I love

It is an action, this Love.

I felt a hunger inside, so
I prayed for the communion of Peace
within the fight for Peace.

I surrendered to its pureness,
to its wholeness,
and there I shed my skin.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
These are times to look inward.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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c lynn brooks

Sat, 2020-06-13 19:32

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I felt each of your words. beautiful poem

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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 10:17

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Never before do I recall feeling so ignorant. These days offer ample opportunity to change that.
Thank you!
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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 10:29

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I have hope, too!
Thank you for reading.
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tyro

Sun, 2020-06-14 02:35

I like the poem in general but what I like most is the spiritual quality it projects.

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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 10:39

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I tried to post this poem a few days ago, and my quirky computer (or my quirky computer skills) didn't take for some reason. I took it as a "sign" that maybe personal spiritual growth is just that - personal. But poetry is all about growth and realization. "We are not human beings in a spiritual world, we are spiritual beings in a human world." (I truly don't know who originally said this, it has been paraphrased so many times.) This year has had significant opportunities for growth, especially the past month or so, and especially spiritual.
Thank you!
L

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Geezer

Sun, 2020-06-14 11:06

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It does show that there are people out there; that want to get rid of the ignorance and hate. I believe that you might make a better statement with changing the line that goes: "I prayed for the comfort of peace" to I prayed for a satisfying meal of love".
To satisfy the hunger in the previous line. Of course as always, it is for you to use or change and use, or disregard. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 11:23

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I really like your suggestion! It brings a lot to the poem. Maybe not word for word, but I want to work with that thought.
Thank you!
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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 11:34

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I would like your opinion - I have edited the line and changed 'comfort' to 'communion' to refer to a spiritual context of bread and wine, sharing a meal and a connection in general. Please let me know!
Thank you!
L

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Geezer

Sun, 2020-06-14 17:28

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As I said; yours to use or not. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 17:41

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Thanks for your help!
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Lavender

Sun, 2020-06-14 15:19

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Thank you for your very kind remark! I always appreciate your generous input.
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