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the rebellion of mankind
a sting to civilization
what a tyrannical world

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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it is...it really is!

how are you doing? you sound down in the dumps. should we be worried? nice poem.

*hugs, Cat

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Yeah, I am. You got it right Cat!
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

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I hope you get through your rough patch okay. yesterday we got an estimate on repairing our roof because of ice damage: 22,000 $ I hope he takes payments.

love & hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Much appreciated for your concern. Wow, that's a huge amount of money for repairing. Indeed, this is a very high budget!
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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Title un -cap
It's like one is shouting

Lovedly, I was not shouting... I have been writing all my titles that way. Check all my posts.

Thanks for stopping by.
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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Couldn’t agree more. Could disagree until I was out breath. Truly I think it’s everything.

Excellent writing
Tim

Always appreciate you for stopping by, for reading and commenting.
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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Hi, Jackweb,
Oppression in humans will only last so long, and then it takes shape in uprisings. Your title gives one a lot to think about.
L

Perfectly seen! Sometimes I wonder how you understand things deeper. You're one of the sage men here. Thanks for reading and reviewing! .
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"Time will crush on us if we don't utilize it. Just remember, you're an element of time".

~Jackweb

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