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.................................................................nuiseance.....
drawn
ribbon
silk and such
drawled with cinnamon red four
dabbled drowsing
dowsing
fingers light
the little pulse
like wavelets minnow nibble
this brilliant shoal
wrecks the ruin
carnage and cream
the splendid scars
the ached scream
steady aim
like tremulous
glee
pupil alleys
while the streaming
sunlight
burns effortless effigies
in that dark
narrow
comforting
trap
where happiness
crashes
like
rains
fills up the void
like rain
only ink on a page
runs
you whispered
in nocturne landscapes
while the fan
whimpered
and the television
sped its drama scenes
....
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2014-03-04 01:28
I've always wanted to do this.
Read one of your poems in two very different ways. Let me know what you think.
First reading
https://soundcloud.com/jess-tapper/33-ellipses-nuiseance-ellipsis
https://soundcloud.com/jess-tapper/33-ellipses-nuiseance
cheers,
Jess
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Esker
Tue, 2014-03-04 09:34
reading word thoughts on my cellphone recorder
small snippets...part of articulation
and reading as poetry as performance
the greeks did it and built theatres for this
that lasted to this day....storytelling
important in days of yore and now
with the internet....
will try to record and do readings..
thank you!
Esker
Tue, 2014-03-04 09:40
first listen of my work here....
i like to hear aloud how its read..
reading we make up for the jangle and
rumble of it in our minds..
filtering the hubaloo all our lives
but in listening to it read
i can feel where it needs tweaking
if im looking for a more smoother
flow..or a ragged exciting read..
i like both readings..the first i
read it as in my own speed
but the second was good
because its proper..its without
punctuation....
like music with no rest..
more and more and with the
accompnying graph
which i like.....math is intuition
in a visual approach
ratios and per centages
etc..
all making more sense to
me
will come back later when
i have time..
work errands.. lots of walking
people watching notations
birds...etc..
thank you jess..
raj
Tue, 2014-03-04 14:49
Esker
Please excuse my ignorance, yet after multiple reads I have tried to decode the abstract from your free flowing ink and wonder if it's about real v/s pseudo real. It's possible that I may have been way off target from the essence of this write and as an amateur would like to learn where you want to take the reader...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Esker
Tue, 2014-03-04 14:58
its the duality of it..the twinning...
perception of the solidity of ideal..and the shadow cast by it.
illuminat i on..
thank you ,
raj
Tue, 2014-03-04 15:13
Esker
Thank you for enlightening me about the essence of your poem which made me read again and digest.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)