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My Only Published Poem (March Contest)
My friends wonder why
I don't often write
a poem about you;
"maybe she's not aware
of the Mother's day!"
"or maybe she doesn't care,"
they'd simply say.
They didn't know then
that you're the only
published poem I've
ever had
mother.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
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Comments
Roscoe Lane
Mon, 2016-05-09 00:14
Very clever,
Very clever write. Love Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Rula
Mon, 2016-05-09 00:20
Roscoe!
Thank you for the supporting words. Much appreciated.
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lovedly
Mon, 2016-05-09 03:44
happy mothers day Rula
do read my BLOG message for u
Rula
Mon, 2016-05-09 04:51
Thank you Lovedly
for your kind wishes
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lovedly
Mon, 2016-05-09 10:46
Is the P
in title purposely
Rula
Mon, 2016-05-09 11:46
Thank you
Hawk eye :)
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lovedly
Mon, 2016-05-09 12:58
and they say
cataract I have
I said no ops please
let me go blind if so be it writ
LORD BYRON
returns in me
raj
Mon, 2016-05-09 15:43
Wow Rula!
Wow Rula!
the closing lines are so vivid and strong..."you are the only published poem I have ever had mother"..these lines keep ringing in my ears long after the read...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Mon, 2016-05-09 22:48
Dear Raj
À wow, coming from you, is absolutely highly appreciated.
Thank you!
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raj
Tue, 2016-05-10 15:50
All because the poem deserved
All because the poem deserved a wow Rula. Pretty out of the box way of writing this one...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Keith Logan
Wed, 2016-05-11 23:47
An excellent example
of free verse, something I wish I was better at. It is also brimming with love and pathos. It shows consummate skill the way you keep the winding up of the main point to very last word. Alone, the first and third verse make up a poem but the middle verse is a masterful inclusion.
Keith Logan
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Rula
Thu, 2016-05-12 00:02
Hello Keith
really appreciate your kind words. Been the first comment I'm getting today, I am not sure if anything will make my day better than your kind visit.
Thank you
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Rula
Mon, 2019-04-01 03:04
Mark
You're so kind. I'm happy you like it.
Thank you.
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scribbler
Thu, 2019-03-28 09:45
Hi Rula
A short sweet poem. Has your mother read it?
Rula
Mon, 2019-04-01 03:02
Never
Unfortunately Alzheimer left her with very little appreciation for anything...if at all.
V.much appreciate your kind visit Stan.
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