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My Ivy

I lay face up, not a care in the world
My thoughts are soothing, polished and pearled
Isn’t nature amazing? Isn’t it sweet?
Can you hear the robins, the birds singing ‘tweet tweet?’

But as I lay, immersed in grass
A thought occurs, wicked as broken glass
I couldn’t shape it, describe it if I tried
Except that somewhere, somehow… someone lied?

What if this perfect nature is all but a farce?
I know happy places are small and sparse
Here is too good to be true, though I desperately hope it is
Are candies not sweet then, and sodas not fizz?

The world is suddenly topsy turvy
Are circles sharp and squares curvy?
My breaths start coming shallow and quick
My stomach clenches, I think I’ll be sick

Out of the blue, you appear
To help me to save me, oh how quickly you came here!
Your head rests in my lap, your fur on my skin
How silky your ears are, how are you, where have you been?

Oh my loyalist friend, my dearest accomplice
My dear sister, my moral compass
I love you, my sweet dog
I love you, like a drowning man to a log

Thank you for saving me from my dark spiral
If I posted a video of you it would go viral
Thank you, my four legged friend
Thank you Ivy, my dog until the end.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Dedicated to the service dog I'm fostering now! Ivy is the best girl, and I know she'll be the best helper to a client someday. I wrote this at midnight last night, so excuse any spelling mistakes you may see. Enjoy!
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Comments

I like dogs so I'm partial to others
that do ... I wonder, do you train
dogs for services?
The poem, great subject and I
like the way you've not let me know
it's about a dog until the end of the
poem ... my critique would be taste,
it seems too sticky sweet (for me),
rhyme rather easy but that's fine,

thanks for sharing, my critique is
mine alone, not meant to hurt, only
my reaction to your poem.

Hi themoonman!
Thanks for the feedback, much appreciated. I don't train dogs to be service dogs, but I do foster them and reinforce their training. The organization I work with is called Dogs with Wings, it's really cool. Thanks for the comment!

All the best and happy writing,
Bookdragon

And I know from that Elysian freight
She will brave but once more the Atlantic weather,
When dory and fisherman sail by fate
To seek for the Happy Isles together.
-Robert Frost

author comment

it's a very vivid expression of the unconditional love you and your dog Ivy share...it feels a little unfair that Ivy can't understand this poem but I am sure he feels it through your touch and your petting...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you so much! I hope she does. She's quite the rock star!

All the best and happy writing,
Bookdragon

And I know from that Elysian freight
She will brave but once more the Atlantic weather,
When dory and fisherman sail by fate
To seek for the Happy Isles together.
-Robert Frost

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