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Murder Me Not…(conclusion)

Before me he stood snarling voraciously
Two hundred and thirty some odd pound
bulging half man half rat
Standing ready to vise the life from me
Paralyzed by fear I looked to my hand
I launch the useless length of garden hose
Eternity expires as I watch it end over end
It cartwheels into massive pectorals thudding futilely
against sparse hair
He almost looks like Castro as he takes a
last pull off a girthy Cuban cigar
Embers diffuse across hardwoods
Adding effect to his demonic screech…
I awaken to my piercing alarm clock
Still hungover and still late for work.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Well here it is in all its Ratman glory. Sorry for the delay I was super busy and super confused by the story and the order. I love it anyway!
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

entirely my fault for the screw-up in the order, sorry about that! As to the confusion in the story, that was caused by my screw-up too! Sorry and I will take greater care in keeping the order straight next time! I was thrilled with the turn that you took with the story and your imagination is equal to any of the rest of the participants. I think it was a great experiment and look forward to trying another one! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Some nightmare only to wake up to another.
Mark

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I like it...boy o boy could I ever tell you about dream sequences...I've had a few myself!!! great conclusion.

*hugs, Cat

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Fantastic job and bringing the story to a close.

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This was a weird journey
I like weird,
Tim

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so, what is next? anyone know?

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