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Murder Me Not…(conclusion)

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Sat, 2022-07-30 16:18

Before me he stood snarling voraciously
Two hundred and thirty some odd pound
bulging half man half rat
Standing ready to vise the life from me
Paralyzed by fear I looked to my hand
I launch the useless length of garden hose
Eternity expires as I watch it end over end
It cartwheels into massive pectorals thudding futilely
against sparse hair
He almost looks like Castro as he takes a
last pull off a girthy Cuban cigar
Embers diffuse across hardwoods
Adding effect to his demonic screech…
I awaken to my piercing alarm clock
Still hungover and still late for work.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

Is the internal logic consistent?

Last few words:

Well here it is in all its Ratman glory. Sorry for the delay I was super busy and super confused by the story and the order. I love it anyway!

Editing stage:

Editing - draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Sat, 2022-07-30 19:50

It was...

entirely my fault for the screw-up in the order, sorry about that! As to the confusion in the story, that was caused by my screw-up too! Sorry and I will take greater care in keeping the order straight next time! I was thrilled with the turn that you took with the story and your imagination is equal to any of the rest of the participants. I think it was a great experiment and look forward to trying another one! ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

Sun, 2022-07-31 04:57