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Mirror Image Poems

Submitted by Bmoxie on Wed, 2022-12-28 19:50

All the noise in her brain
clamped to the page
in simple refrains
for the wise old sage
could never be
simply a victim
of her poetry.

Drawn in by loose letters
needing a call to order,
the words rattle forth
before they destroy her.

Mirror image poems
half form in her mind
like books on shelves
in solid singling lines.

In the beginning
was the word
blurred, obscured
theatrically absurd.

Thin blue lines of worldly despair
words all lost to childhood prayers
her deficiencies were
but a failure of words
before she grew horns
on her tongue and her curves.

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

How was my language use?

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing stage:

Not actively editing

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Week Contest December 25 to 31st 2022

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Rula

Thu, 2022-12-29 04:47

Wow!

Though not one hundred percent sure of how to interpret this, yet I am facinated in a way. I can relate as I feel almost the same when I get the inspiration to write a new piece of poetry
The last couple of lines left me speechless.
Welcome to our world.

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Bmoxie

Wed, 2023-01-04 11:00

Thanks for your time and

Thanks for your time and positive feedback ... unfortunately I don't do Instagram

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-12-29 08:29

In the eye...

of the beholder. Your word usage is good, and I didn't flutter around on it.
I saw a teenage girl, who may have been bullied, but eventually
got back at her tormentors by becoming sexy/beautiful and well educated in the ways
of society. She is a wordsmith that can cut to the quick, when she feels insulted.
That is what I got from it. The rhyme and pattern are good with rhyme and near rhyme
and the logic is made by the reader. ~ Geezer.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Bmoxie

Wed, 2023-01-04 11:02

Thanks Geezer ... you have

Thanks Geezer ... you have correctly gotten my meaning!

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Lavender

Thu, 2022-12-29 10:56

Mirror Image Poems

Hello, Bmoxie,
As I read this, I sense a struggle one has with evolving spirituality. The study and eventual questioning of the written word, and then the pondering over our own prayers. This is bold in language and theme, and very introspective. I will be curious to read your responses!
Thank you,
L

Bmoxie

Wed, 2023-01-04 11:03

Yes I can get very

Yes I can get very introspective at times. Glad you enjoyed it

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2022-12-29 11:20

hello Bmoxie,

your poem is both inspired and inspiring! I singled out these lines:

her deficiencies were
but a failure of words

that really cuts to the crux of the poem. I have felt this way often. my muse usually Intervenes and brings me through it. your rhythm and flow are excellent. I can find no fault, your poem is perfect.

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-12-29 20:45

Wow

I see a tormented soul who found strength and release in her writing and who grew to stand up against those who wronged her. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Bmoxie

Wed, 2023-01-04 11:04

Thanks. Poetry writing does

Thanks. Poetry writing does us all good doesn't it!

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Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-12-30 05:14

I second that

Rose Black sees what I see here. Great title! There are times when I want to write and there are times I need to write, both approaches help make sense of my feelings, sometimes I even write well as a bonus. That is certainly the case with your piece here. Good language and I like the underlying theme you’ve got going on with the mirror/body image/confidence returning. I really like this one.

Tim

Bmoxie

Wed, 2023-01-04 11:08

I am very impressed by the

I am very impressed by the responses this poem has gotten, especially yours. You get me!

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Jackweb

Fri, 2022-12-30 11:46

Wonderful!

The poem looks simple to understand yet is it seems to be a hard nut! Lines encrypted with poetic elements. Needing to be decoded. The master key is in the hand of the writer! Lol! Excellent piece!
.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Rula

Mon, 2023-01-02 00:49