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Mawkish+true

Submitted by kowque on Wed, 2024-10-02 19:35

You hurt me.
You forgot,
I am someone.
Someone's daughter.
Someone's mother.
Someone's child.
Someone's legacy.

I sat in the sun
And felt my skin burn
I remembered
How it feels:
I am corporeal
I hurt
I exist
I pee
I cry
I bleed

You cannot erase me!

I nourish

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Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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Thu, 2024-10-03 01:40

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Geezer

Fri, 2024-10-04 11:27

I felt the emotional cry here; I'm not sure of the circumstances, but I can see you sitting on the beach, waiting for your date; who said they would bring the picnic lunch, a blanket and drinks. He never shows up! I get the shout, "You cannot erase me!" However, the last line has me baffled. ~ Geez.
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Leslie

Sun, 2024-10-06 21:14

Mawkish+true

I thought that this was honest and true. Two qualities that partially make you,you. You cannot be erased , you've written your soul on neo. You most definately do nourish all who know you!

Our dreams lost! Lost on an ocean of turmoil! Soon a solution will arrive! Until then I will write!

Candlewitch

Mon, 2024-10-07 06:25

Dear koki,

I hear you..."you cannot erase me", either!

much love, Cat

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