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Make hay while the sun shines.(Very serious limerick)
There was a lot of people in jail
Many said they would never do well
They broke out one day
Just to make hay
Now the farmer thinks they are swell
La La Sparrow
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Structured: Western
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2014-11-02 10:46
Seriously...
funny? I got a good chuckle out of it. ~ Gee
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Ian.T
Sun, 2014-11-02 11:03
Gee
Good to see you, and thanks for your visit,
Yours Ian.
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
weirdelf
Sun, 2014-11-02 21:07
It has the poetential for seriousness,
but you are a very silly man (said with the greatest love), and the humour shines through.
Excellent limerick form.
cheers,
Jess
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lovedly
Sun, 2014-11-02 23:07
jail
does it
gel
with well and swell ???
course it must
bard is deaf
like hell
he may dwell
weirdelf
Sun, 2014-11-02 23:47
dear lovedly
are you becoming bitter? This does not sound like your usual humour and kindness. Please listen to
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/examples-of-limericks
and try again.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry