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LA RACHELLE

drunk is the moon...the poisoned stars drawn to their lagoon
the lager cup
the last smiles
before we touched down
I should have known
what was up

into the seamless cold
and veins of snow crawling
on the tarmacs face
like a vision
lost in the steam
and traffic and these lights

burning amber yellow
green and red
you were a voyage
across the rivers of
my damned

and now beneath the
chill of quilts in a dampened
cold delivery of Flu
I shiver and shake
thinking of you in the land
of heat and sake of
mirage's shimmering
a serpents mirror
the wind claws its coral dark
dance the orchestra of
moans in the wires
and windows cracks

I loved you and loathed
you...but you are never
coming back

the simple carry on
leaving behind most
and taking the
jewels
the soul of life

I burn the candles
from the trove
were they for me?
a love not moved
not budged
nor stolen

while inside I break
broken
and frozen

when I heal
and the banks
are high
and the drifts
in fields
of dead summers
leisure
I will survive

till then I am
a ghost
in the shadows
of this glimmer
the little light
of hope
and cupids
empty quiver

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I have a strange love for this, it seemed to go from an aircraft in winters eye trying to land then on to a love that has gone cold.
Many pictures cross over as more is read. Loved it!
Yours Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I have been reading you, Steven, Comments difficult to write- my fingers are losing their mobility.

Your poetry is a mosaic of the conscious and subconscious life: the true and complete human being. You force language beyond measure and make it tell more than one ever thought language can express. You have gone beyond metaphor and bring us to a new way of thinking and new an exquisite
realities,

joe

hard to believe this is the thoughts in my head daily half the time
half escaping reality..seeing much and realizing society is supposed
to not see that...and then Intuition to read so much...
stood in line the other day trying to buy some fuel for my lighter.
i described it about five times..short words..finally the clerk got it
"Lighter fluid" ....I think it was....can I purchase fuel for my zippo
do you sell ronson for putting fuel in the lighting device...
Ronson..(pointing now) but not the butane!!....they held it up
and I nodded...and they then said..Lighter Fluid!!

like this....i have a hell of a time speaking loud enough and in
simple words....most people dont have a clue to what Im talking
about....and I believe it....I taped myself often...
so the writing at least as poetry makes sense and for this Im
grateful! emotiion...feeling..observation..delving...hanging
on letting go...control...all of it...just like me....
and yah...having great luck with this....ha ha..

thank U for appreciating the talent.....when all else crumbles
at least I can say I was a poet...

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