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I'm Sorry

I'm sorry I couldn't face the world today,
And instead, I wished it all away.

Couldn't wrestle into day clothes today,
So in my night clothes, I did stay.

I'm sorry that my pain consumed me,
And I wasn't filled with glee.

Couldn't fight the feelings inside me,
Yes, I know that you find it hard to see.

I'm sorry that my pains are hidden,
Like a secret that's forbidden.

Isn't visual like a depression,
Yet it's as awful by its progression.

I'm sorry that I'm not always strong,
And I know that you must think it’s wrong.

Truly I wish it wouldn't persist,
It isn't something I can resist.

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The poem "I'm Sorry" is a heartfelt and honest portrayal of the struggles that come with dealing with emotional pain. The use of simple language and short, concise lines effectively convey the speaker's feelings of frustration and helplessness. The repetition of "I'm sorry" throughout the poem adds a sense of guilt and shame, which are common emotions that often accompany mental health struggles.

One possible line edit could be to change "Yes, I know that you can't see" to "I know it's hard for you to see". This change would acknowledge that the speaker understands that mental health struggles can be difficult for others to comprehend, while also expressing empathy for their loved ones who may be struggling to understand.

Overall, "I'm Sorry" is a powerful poem that sheds light on the often-hidden struggles of mental illness. It is a reminder to be kind and understanding towards those who may be going through a difficult time, even if we cannot fully understand their pain.

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many do not see, there are those of us that struggle every day. I get it! I know that you know, how difficult that it is for us to go on. Having to 'present' to the rest of the world, while suffering the doubt about who we are, and needing the interaction of others, is an all- consuming job, that takes a great deal of strength; witness those who seem to suffer from this malady the most, the best of comedians and the ones who make us laugh and think. Your next to last line, could use an [It] in the beginning, to make it smoother., other than that, I find this a pretty good piece of work. I hope that you may find a modicum of relief here at Neo. Keep writing and you will find at least a little satisfaction, I guarantee it! ~ Geezer.

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Hello, Tigger,
The rhyme scheme and the short lines give a direct approach and a clear message to your poem. I very much like the title, and the theme is relatable. You've brought a strong personal depth to the piece. I'm wondering if the last two lines would feel a bit more final if they were switched?
Thank you,

Yes you are right, thank you
I have switched the lines now.

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You've written a straight-forward poem with a gentle, yet powerful message.

I completely understand the honest feelings and thoughts of this piece. I feel the same, for poetry has saved me, too! poetry an musical lyrics. it is very nice to meet you. I know that I will enjoy your poems to come. welcome to Neopoet.

*hugs, Cat

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