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I Watched You Fall

Submitted by Lavender on Wed, 2022-10-12 10:25

I watched you fall
so gracefully,
like yellow sighs
among the trees,
red silent notes
in harmony,
orange vestiges
of summer's memory -
and as you fell
near to the ground,
your final rest,
your journey bound,
I gazed up to
your empty trees
to witness them bow,
most reverently.
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Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Wed, 2022-10-12 10:39

Not a thing...

that I would change! Simple clean, and most readable. I needed this! Thank you for the breath of clear, cool air, like Autum is supposed to be. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Wed, 2022-10-12 10:54