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Hurdles
It’s smiles for miles
Through all the trials
I’m high stepping hurdles
With ease and some style
Hurdles get higher
Feet become mired
I’m dragged down to earth
Deflated and tired
Choose naught but to rise
Dry off my eyes
Patch up skinned knees and
Relinquish the cries
The race knows no end
Follows no trend
It’s likely to break me
Lest I learn to bend
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Or “whack-a-mole”.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2022-09-30 10:20
I like...
everything about this! Your title, the word choices and the theme. One thing I'm not sure of how to interpret is: "whack-a-mole"
I am perplexed! ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-09-30 10:31
Whack-a-mole
Is an arcade game where little groundhogs or whatever they are pop up out of the random holes in the machine and you bash them with the padded mallet. They keep popping up and you can never get them all. It’s a metaphor for the challenges life throws at you.
Hey, who reads the authors comments anyway? Lol just kidding with you.
Thanks Geez,
Tim
Geezer
Fri, 2022-09-30 16:29
I know about...
whack-a-mole, I just wasn't sure about how you were using the metaphor. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-10-01 09:17
This is great
The ups and downs and overcoming them when you hit the bottom! Your poems always have such a profound meaning and speak to realistic situations faced by many each day (both positive and negative). Always a pleasure to read. Good job!
~RoseBlack~
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2022-10-01 11:22
Love
I love all you so much and as good as I am with words there simply aren’t ones that convey the emotional support I feel here.
You are all kind beyond reckoning
Thanks for welcoming me home
Tim
Lavender
Mon, 2022-10-03 16:04
Hurdles
Hi, Tim,
I can relate to this so well! You are a great advocate, for yourself and others!
Thank you!
L
P.S. Unfortunately, sometimes in life we are the mole, and other times we are the mallet.