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HOT CASINGS

days run too nights...nights
run too days...
no ashpalt blacktop out
here...B-ball on an intel
wire post...
reel too reel
Buddy from cleveland
says it beats changing
casettes
We gamble him
batteries....but the bastards
good...got horseshoes up
his ass and out in the jungle
U use everything U got
to get back
git back

boredoms the worse
I go over my gear
gunner says Im gonna
wear out the rifling
but he slaps me
on the shoulder
hes cool dig
He knows
been in country
two sixty and up
We punch another
cold one waiting
for the co to
bring us new
orders...
we got a bet on
this...bookie
from new jersey
a little runner
got his system
got his hooch
next too the ammo
dump....but he
says he sleeps
right next too
the gas works
back home
we dont knock
it when he says
home
we been here
so long ourselves
we are thin as
bamboo
never see a fatman
a tunnel rat
we laugh
call em boyz
Mommasans
but them cornfed
huskers hustle
the fifty
and one of the
Kentucky kids
got a rice still
going...go figure

booney hat with
pin rings and inhalers
I quit smoking
after a night
watchs smokers
got taken out

trade me my smokes
for batteries
for the reel too reel
better n rvn radio
call me "Arty"
cause I draw and paint
I dont think about it
but I will live on
magic marker
smell of immortality
like fresh ink
on the newbies
uniforms
I trade em
figuring it will
give em a chance
save me sewing
something which
reminds me of
home....just
enough...

like the casings
remind me of
bacon grease
I never wear
a t shirt
and I laugh
tell em
"If its too hot
in the kitchen
for yah..U dont
know how too
cook"
being crazy
goes a long
way out
here

and everyone
knows
all your wounds
heal
if U make it

..

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Comments

I felt like you took me somewhere else with this piece, and that ending was really poignant. Don't know exactly what I love about it but it really hit me. Only advice is maybe break up the second stanza but that's coming from one of the members of the new generation with a rapidly fading attention span. Other than that it was a piece that reminds me why I picked up poetry as it felt like a work of art. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff.

Nick.

the long lines are like holding down the trigger...heats up boredom fast
the hypnotic sway of the beat..
Thanks Nick...!

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i met guys who could fling words like a dealers amazing hand
but the raw joy of it was missing...
they only moved when it was a sure thing
busking..giving moves for free
thats magic
writing for me is a passion
I like it.....dazzleships
if it aint got the pop man why be in it
u aint happy writing your own works
u aint gonna be happy reading
others...and not see the magic
of theirs either

theres more then one trick
then just puling a rabbit from
a hat...poetry is the same
countless illusions

I read New Yorker short stories
and Walrus...good rags too
read for shorts
I like the random weird on the
net...and peoples comments
its like
wow thats a cool way of putting
an observation together
Im gonna use that....

thanks!

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as a non conformist I agree
..but somewhere there are
rules.....

thanks!

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The first is that I am from Cleveland, and the second is that I've been looking all over the place to find casings, because I want to make homemade kielbasa.

actually knew a friend of a friend long ago...they were from cleveland
dad was in the navy...guess they have a navy yard there....
Kielbasa sounds great! think it was mennonites that sold it out
of a tack shoppe feedstore..heavy equipment dude where I once
lived for a summer...Thank U!

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It is a very long poem. I got lost and I do not know what to say. Sorry.

xxxxx

as long as we have a Wendy or
two to show us along or tink...

the bigger boyz know how too tear it up
through the long woods
hunters fishers
forest dwellers

at least getting lost
knows then a chore
is too be found

thank U!

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