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Grow
My wife as my heroine
Shines bright and stands tall
The mountains of trouble
She tackles it all
There’s bills and the kids
It’s busy, this life
An emotional husband
Obsessed with his wife
There’s also career
She’s a chick with a plan
Cares for her colleagues
As well as her man
She’s funny, that smile
So quick with her jokes
Uses her guile
To lift up her folks
She holds and protects
The strings of my heart
Forgives my transgressions
Provides a new start
The more that I love her
The more I let go
The closer we are
The faster we grow
Style / type:
Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words:
She’s pretty great and she is pretty too.
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Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.
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Geezer
Mon, 2022-11-07 09:19
Room to breathe...
Your title intriqued me and brought me in.
It did just what a title is supposed to do.
Your rhyme and rhythm flawless! A simple poem, that expresses
the joy you find in loving your wife. A lot of people think
that in order to be a great poem, it has to be deep thoughts
couched in almost incomprehensable lines. I am not one of those.
Of course, every once in a while we hit magic and a poem is superb,
the thoughts hit all the right notes, it is readily understood by all
and fits all the criteria for "one of those AWESOME poems.
Here, I see a gem, that was cut and polished by hand and really
means something by virtue of the simplicity and honesty of it.
Well done! ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2022-11-07 10:34
Holy cow
Thanks brother. It was written with the expressed purpose to be sent her in text. She received it adoringly as usual
Tim
author commentGeezer
Mon, 2022-11-07 10:44
I was hoping...
that was the case! I also thought that maybe you might recognize the salutation that I started with. I started with it in hopes that you would understand that I understand. ~ Geez.
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Jackweb
Mon, 2022-11-07 11:30
A very lovely poem!
She would be excited to receive this as a text message. Writing poetry to express how we feel, what we saw in them is a wonderful thing to do. Women are meant to be adored. Me too, I love the simplicity of the language use. Beautifully weaved!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Lavender
Mon, 2022-11-07 12:00
Grow
Hi, Tim,
All of the honesty and appreciation in the first five stanzas make the final stanza so strong and significant. You are really blessed, and so is she. Perfect title.
Thank you!
L