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Golden Opportunity for Unity (Build It Right Now!)

Submitted by Regi Taylor on Sat, 2016-11-05 21:53

Almighty! Almighty!
Grant us each others love
Grant us Unity

Almighty! Almighty!
We are you, you are we
One commUNITY

Almighty!
Make me an instrument
Of your will

Almighty!
'Til my prayers for peace
Are fulfilled

Precious Yahweh!
To the downtrodden
Lord impart justice

Beloved Jehovah!
We must embrace
For the sake of our children

Mighty Allah!
Hate is a condition
We must fix

Jah Love!
We are Unity's tools
We must build it

Great Buddha!
Stop us tearing down love
With impunity

Sweet Jesus! Sweet Jesus!
GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

Exalted Muhammad!
GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

Krishna! Krishna!
GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

Gay brother, my brother
At society's table
Take your seat

Gay sister, my sister
There's a welcome mat
At your feet

Brethren of no faith
Are all blessings from above

Bless and believe
In each other

Seek common ground
Faith differences be resolved

Yeah brother, my brother
Symbolize a love
For all Humanity

Yeah sister, my sister
Nurture like mother's love
Preserve dignity

See no need for Unity
You have blindness

Build Unity right now
Spread Human-Kindness...

Right Now!

GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

Build it right now!

GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

Brother, brother!

GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

Sister, sister!

GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

All mankind!

GOLDEN OpportUNITY FOR UNITY

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Copyright 2016 Regi Taylor All Rights Reserved

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Structured: Western
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing

Comments

swamp-witch

Mon, 2017-03-20 13:08

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Interesting call to action here! You don't always see many people calling for all people and all religions to unite. It is certainly the dream, but so many people are biased that it's refreshing when you find a poem like this one acknowledging so many diverse people.

I see that you are not actively editing, but here's a thought to consider if you decide to come back to this poem: why?

How's that for a question! Just kidding. :) What I mean is: why should we unite? I would love to see the poem explore the value of unity more. Why does this poem need to be written? How could it help?

I think it is a valuable poem, certainly, but it may be a fun exercise for you to think about why you wrote it, what personally makes you call for unity, and use those personal experiences to make the poem more unique and personal to you. Let the readers know about you as our brother in humanity.

Take care,
Kelsey

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