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FALL--upated
FALL
And all the heavens
stood watching
in awe
and in the silence
terror brings
they saw
you fall
whirling ever down
to this unholy ground
And deeper
into your hell
echoes of Judas cries
you heard
as you fell
ITALIAN
CADUTA
E poi tutto il cielo
nel silenzio che porta
il terrore
guardava
Lei
che stava
verso la terra profana
cadendo.
Ed a misura al buio
si avvicinava
echi d Giuda
ascotava
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Comments
loved
Sun, 2012-03-11 19:35
At times I feel
At times I feel
you are the most normal self
of human beings
those who
excel
loved
Geremia
Sun, 2012-03-11 19:48
No, my friend it s you who
No, my friend it s you who truly excels and you have many years to do more..
Joe
loved
Sun, 2012-03-11 20:33
I only hope that cryptic guy ...we all know
I only hope that cryptic guy ...we all know
escapes... your salutation
this is to my mind
now uppermost,
as you are the Earth's crust
we all know
So for you friend
I toast...
The years yet to traverse
are matters of conjecture
you may not know
why I say so...
loved
Geremia
Sun, 2012-03-11 21:23
As time steals my days
As time steals my days
and I decay
Still I have my mind
and pray
the beast will never find
and if it does
i hope not to know
whereof
I came
whereto I go
and yearn to leave
this place
in the bliss
of ignorance
my enemies
my friends again
failures meaningless
where opinion rules
all betrayers fools
for havving never seen
the men behind the screen
of words
that is me.
Nordic cloud
Mon, 2012-03-12 17:01
I do like this poem of a
I do like this poem of a comment, or is it a poem?
If a poem I would do a few tweaks but I like its see-saw of thoughts.
Subtle description.
The main poem What do I say, I like it, good,
I felt tugged into the vortex of descent.
And left slightly uneasy.
Anni.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
scribbler
Sun, 2012-03-11 22:09
hi
Pretty good description of Lucifer's fall for a free verse lol.........stan
Geremia
Sun, 2012-03-11 22:50
It "weren't" Lucifer I was
It "weren't" Lucifer I was talking about , Stan, but someone very close...A metaphrical prediction,