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EAGLES DANCING

Submitted by Geremia on Wed, 2012-09-26 16:08

EAGLES DANCING

I saw the eagles fly
a dance of two
across the vast in blue
wings in tandem
determination

suddenly
one was pulled away
into a cloud darkly grey
by an unknown
determination

I saw an eagle fly
a dance of one
across a lonely sky
with singular
determination....

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Geremia

Wed, 2012-09-26 18:06

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Beautifully expressed.

Joe

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Ian.T

Thu, 2012-09-27 05:54

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Can only say another beaut from projected present.
Please can we have some of your work in other directions as your use of words and vision would capture many other things, Yours Ian.T
PS:- I did see Eagles dance just below me when doing a job in the mountains in Africa it was beautiful to watch, they both stayed though.

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

Geremia

Thu, 2012-09-27 05:55

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Will do, Ian :)

joe

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