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A "Dribble" is half a "Drabble"

Submitted by ImageWeaver on Fri, 2021-05-21 08:14

A "Dribble" is half a "Drabble"... and a Drabble is 100 words... see Wikipedia

The "dribble" (also known as the "minisaga," 50 words)

"Daily Perspective..." 50

A day like any other, and yet like no other,  because are any two days the same if we truly pay attention to the minute details...?
After all, the Earth rotates 360 degrees every day, creating seasonal shadows and sunshine that shift and play with
ever-changing grace, around the world.

The "drabble" (also known as "microfiction," 100 words)

"In this Human Place" 100

Outside daylight softly creeping into the crevices of night a slow autumn dawnglow suffusing the waterlogged morn.
One by one suburban army set their steel chariots in motion launching into the fray of yet another day.
Kookaburra’s laugh drowned out as the garbage truck rumbles past indicating day and time, in this human place.
In silence she listens hidden in morning shadows that cling to dusty corners,
5 a.m coffee already cooling in its hand made ceramic mug. Single digits leave frosty kisses on morning grass, and coffee cools too quickly and never lasts long enough to warm the soul.

Unfinished 100

Sitting with unfinished thoughts
day closing in as fingers of autumn chill spill down the hill
to fill the corners and crevices of the suburban valley.
Echoes carry.
Dogs barking... music ebbing, flowing
as night breeze drifts gently around man-made spaces.
On the nearby highway vehicles race, their pace in fluctuating rhythm with traffic lights.
Muted is the twitterlight fading, day waning into moon-gazing moments, crickets sing their song of night, and I... I sit with unfinished thoughts, caught in the headlights of my own reality
never sure how I got this far, or how far I have to go.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2021-05-22 07:09

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an early morning riser that watches the day slink past. My only complaint is that you should break the lines to make them more or less of equal length. Nice, descriptive narrative! ~ Geez.
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ImageWeaver

Sat, 2021-05-22 17:48

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Nice to see you... thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.
I wasn't aware that equal line length was an ideal requirement of poetry or prose.
Interesting thought.
I tend to allow the words to flow, rather then try to make them fit a predetermined pattern.
Perhaps that's why my book didn't succeed.
Too old to change now, I enjoy how I write.

Sharonlee Imageweaver

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Geezer

Sun, 2021-05-23 17:47

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The lines into about equal lengths. is not a requirement, but it is conducive to easier reading. I didn't mean to imply that you should cut them off or rearrange them to make shorter thoughts. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

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