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Disambiguation

Submitted by Sen99 on Mon, 2024-10-14 19:04

When sinking in the mire
Water muddy with confusion
Meaning disappears into a black swamp
Redundant words drown in brain fog
Uncertain ground too soft to stand on

When you struggle with meaning
Look at a loved one’s face
Study their facial muscles
Lips pursed, the nose upturned
The eyes have it,
The smile knows it.

Don’t look for a clear explanation
Instead try anti disambiguation
And if you know what that means
Then climb a mountain of baked beans
All those 57 varieties,
Each one the same bloody bean!

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Free verse
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Neopoet Weekly 10/13/24 to 10/19/24
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neopoet

Tue, 2024-10-15 01:10

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Lavender

Tue, 2024-10-15 17:34

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Hello, Sen!
The fact that AI cannot feasibly understand your poem adds a lovely irony to your theme! (A big grin here.) Every line is thought-provoking and engaging. This is both serious in depth, and fun in its carefree manner. "The eyes have it, the smile knows it..." So true. I think I'd leave off punctuation entirely and let the lines flow with open ends - let the reader visit a bit with each thought. Great theme, and creative ending.
Thank you!
L

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