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Crossing Zebra Lines
Flora and fauna
beauty in diversity
don't discriminate-
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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Geezer
Fri, 2018-04-13 23:03
I think...
I got this one right off. Nice.~ Geezer
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raj
Sat, 2018-04-14 05:02
Thanks Gee
for the read and comment
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Sat, 2018-04-14 04:05
V. much dnjoyed
there is beauty in the soun alliteration and consonant use, especially in the 'f' sound in "flora & fauna" also in 'ty' sound in beauty and diversity.
I thiught though the title might do better without the 'zebra' but that's only my opinion.
I have already enjoyed the read
Thank you for sharing dear raj.
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raj
Sat, 2018-04-14 05:06
Hi Rula
thanks for the read and comment...honestly I am not familiar with the sound alteration and consonant use you mentioned...good to know that it happened to be so...
as for the title it was meant to convey that from human perspective we need to cross the black and white divide...
good to know you "v.much dnjoyed" it
warmly...
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Sat, 2018-04-14 06:50
Hahaha
V. Much enjoyed :)
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