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Con Artist

Submitted by Nichole on Fri, 2012-02-24 01:10

Con artist

I'm not the Con artist you made me to be,
You just wanted to change peoples view of me.
Claiming that I am an abuser,
And telling people I am a user.
You tell me to "say it to your face",
Yet you say you'll give me my space.
In a messaged dated on Facebook and signed,
Oh how very divine.....
I see now you're two faced and everything you called me,
everything you shouted from the tops of the trees.
Gimme a break crazy woman I cater to your son,
Yet I feel like it's over, I feel like it's done.
You and I were two peas in a pod,
You chew me out and I just nod.
This won't go anywhere from here but south,
And lady that's because you have a BIG mouth!!!.
I'm standing below you all by my self,
So for now I put my heart on a shelf.
But one day you'll know I'm not a Con artist.
2-24-12

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This is about a fight my mother-in-law and I had back in november that has not been resolved due to her BIG mouth. It's been on my mind a lot, I just felt like writing about it. Thanks .
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emogothgirl

Fri, 2012-02-24 11:02

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that's right, stick it to the (wo)man! lol. but nice write.
always,
mag

Candlewitch

Fri, 2012-02-24 11:04

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Defenitely a good angry rant stemming from personal wounding and hurts. the title fits.

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Nichole

Fri, 2012-02-24 14:33

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Big fight with the mother-in-law quite a while back and it still hasn't been resolved. She's going around telling people that know both her and I how much of a liar and con artist I am. I'd like nothing more than to slap her. But I must show respect seems how she is my fiances mother. It's been bugging me so I must "write it out".
After writing this last night I had a dream about her, She and I made up and went to a pet store LOLLOL
I don't see it ever being fixed, like i stated in the poem she got a BIG mouth. lol
Thanks for reading I enjoyed writing.

Nichole

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scribbler

Fri, 2012-02-24 19:16

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Did not have to be told to deduce this was about a mother in law. So the intent to convey a point was successful for me.........stan

Nichole

Sat, 2012-02-25 00:18

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Why would I be mad at you????
Thank you for your kind words on my poem.
Yes I was very upset when I wrote it. It made me feel better to write.
Thanks again lonnie.

Nichole

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