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C O P U C O R N I A

Submitted by Esker on Sun, 2012-02-26 20:15

huddle
up
dont show the worth

peepshow visions
from the earth

Your fingers are talking
through tangle hair
the restless crowd draws
in the hushed air
and you silence them
with your steady stare

something within moves
the clockwork of you
working

beneath the shaded sky
of fallen grey
where shadows creep
searching for prey

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Mon, 2012-02-27 11:57

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Is Copucornia the name of a woman? This poem reads like a gentle dream, I loved it all but especially these imagery laden lines:

Your fingers are talking
through tangle hair
the restless crowd draws
in the hushed air
and you silence them
with your steady stare

the ending lines pull it all together. A joy to read,

always, Cat

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Esker

Mon, 2012-02-27 15:08

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You said it Cat!

i am so happy that my writing finds favour in a poet
of your calibre
I love your comments on my work
a joy to read and makes my slush filled shoes
on this walk down into my city for cheque cashing
bill paying snowladen scenery worth it

Thank You Cat!!

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