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rush to me
livid thorn
your delicate kiss
shall lace
the bitter warmth
the icy blessing
bestowed
glisten like night
tears the hearty stars
weeping
sweet is the fortitude
of revenge
and scorn
Love will be mine
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Esker
Thu, 2012-04-12 21:47
shelagh
we rip away caresses
scratch odes of ache
with sharp duress
our love hate sake..
author commentMDT
Fri, 2012-04-13 04:48
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i love this!
Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT
loved
Fri, 2012-04-13 05:46
Without your explanations
I feel dumb,
glad you cater
for dwarf -minded folks like me
Nice Canadian
Ontario's poetic
DELIGHT
could you read my Canadian poem
or
I'm now out of sight
loved
William Saint George
Fri, 2012-04-13 13:08
You set it
right in motion with the opening lines
"rush to me
livid thorn"
This reeks of revenge/death
from the start.
A gruesome write,
but is there fortitude
in revenge?
Most likely it is
a balancing act
on a precipice,
overlooking
the waiting rocks
of karma
and consequences.
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
loved
Fri, 2012-04-13 13:30
wisdom speaks for itself
words just flow
from the calmness one knows,
of the being
that we were once ,
now having coped for so long,
yester-years make one strong
and
we bask in the glory
of having only been
loved
Esker
Fri, 2012-04-13 17:59
dive into the reflection
some perish through that
others become stronger
writhing through the rebirth
of t hat experience
author commentEsker
Fri, 2012-04-13 17:57
blackened twist and the gauze reality.. (Wills comment)
love/life rends our thin screen
the illusion of silver
rush to it
the hypnotic flare
experience rending
and then
obsession to make love
its worth
(how people become
another self to be with their
"love")
all part of a narcissism slant on
things lately
but I can see how its a death gruesomely
too
love sometimes crushing its weight
upon the self
collapsing like a vessel in the depths
whose integrity is breached
author commentjudyanne
Sat, 2012-04-14 17:00
revenge is sweet?
love what conjures in my mind with
'lace
the bitter warmth
the icy blessing
bestowed'
but
'hearty stars weeping' ??
'hearty' just doesn't do it for me -
is there a hidden meaning i'm missing?
great write esker - quite dark
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Esker
Sat, 2012-04-14 17:10
"hearty"
the stars have heart
they listen to our pleas
they are the witness to lonely
conjure
and yet our stories and sorrow
shall bring them to tears
and like a teardrop they shall fall
blazing the still
quiet and listening face
when no other is there for offer
Stars do indeed have heart
they are the muses of ancient Greeks
and is not the morning star blazing
precious??
Revenge is sweet sometimes
although its not an admittance to guilt
of any pleasure
without prejudice
its the darkest in the leaving of the brightest day
and before the fresh mornings shine
Thank You Judy for your comment!
author commentjudyanne
Sat, 2012-04-14 17:12
it is just
that 'hearty' conjures in my mind 'jovialness'
and that doesn't fit to my interpretation of the theme of the write
lol just me
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Esker
Sat, 2012-04-14 18:33
jovial...Judy do you know that Jovian from Jupiter terms
I think I could be wrong I havent googled it yet
thats where Im getting my titles from lately
and I used to know where these all were from
because otherwise It would be futile to search
for random titles Its from bits and peices of
memory
Jupiter is large and the moons are for the
greek muses godesses and themes abounding
and yes "Jovial" does relate to "Hearty"
like a hearty-laugh....
am I laughing or are the stars laughing at
the mirth of love
or should I be weeping
falling into that darkness??
thank you Judyanne
author commentjudyanne
Sat, 2012-04-14 18:38
thank you esker
i relate now :)
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Esker
Sat, 2012-04-14 21:02
I really like peoples take on the poems
I can throw in a lot more lines in the work
to make it specific and "set" but I
like the ambiguities here that allows
people to have a take on the work
rather then "It just annoys me"
im just used to chilling with people
from vast backgrounds who think
flexible and fast with that quick
articulation of thought
and to be honest im happy that I was
able to look again at the muses
and my word use in a new light
the benefit of allowing the flow
Not only creative
but responsive to feelings
Thank You
author commentloved
Sun, 2012-04-15 00:22
How I wish you could read my poem HELLO
u r too good
now u too change ur logo
like others too
loved