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Brenna
Wondrous woman
whose own brilliance remains a mystery to her.
An otherworldy mind and heavenly heart,
leave my soul profoundly stirred.
An inexplicable meeting,
and an even unlikelier reunion--
unbelievably sweet,
it's hard to believe that she's human.
A sense of home
while traveling the globe.
Brings with her tranquility
that is evasive on its own.
Simply the greatest;
such an incomparable spirit.
Anything good I exhibit
is something of hers, I've mirrored.
In summary, a goddess.
The absolute best person.
Apple of my eye, my whole world.
Flesh and bone instead of earthen.
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Structured: Western
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Comments
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-06-16 06:10
dear Joe,
welcome to Neopoet,
it is very nice to meet you. your title is good. the poem flows very well and language usage is good. what you are saying comes across easily, without effort. it makes me wonder; can such a creature be? she sounds wonderful.
*hugs, Cat
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-06-16 06:53
Yes...
for millions, who are in love, she exists! I have my very own! Your subtle use of words that almost rhyme and sounds that mingle have brought us a really good piece of work! Your title is ok, but after you are here for a while, you will pick up tips and birth ideas of better. I've already addressed your use of language and I think it is very good. While I am not by nature, much of a romantic-writer, I still appreciate the kind of work you have written. The theme has flowed smoothly from beginning to logical end. Nice. ~ Geezer.
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