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Between Ripples
An occasional gleeful vision of the crowd,
electrified;
does not necessarily constitute crazy.
"Touched a bit I spect"
whispered the reflection.
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China Blue
Fri, 2012-01-27 09:33
Richard
It is always a treat to see you post. AGH this needs to be continued although I know it is a complete thought more on this would be nice
Chrys
Chrys
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themoonman
Sat, 2012-01-28 17:15
Hi Chrys ...
That was my first thought as well
and I still may add some,
thanks
Richard
author commentIan.T
Fri, 2012-01-27 10:43
Richard,
I liked this one and as Chrys said there must be more to come but I could have seen more if only the water would stay still, lol, Yours Ian.T
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themoonman
Sat, 2012-01-28 17:16
Hi Ian,
Good to see you partner, be careful of those waves (lol)
author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2012-01-27 12:34
Dear Richard,
This is a mighty tantalising morsel of prose and I want more! (Greedy, am I!)
always, Cat
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themoonman
Sat, 2012-01-28 17:18
Hiya Cat...
I've been toying with this one and actually have more
for it, perhaps it does need it ehh.
thanks
Richard
author commentscribbler
Sat, 2012-01-28 23:45
hello
the momentary reflection caught between ripples.....very nice. About the only way I cold see to expand this would be to add another ripple but I 'spect you have a better way in mind...........stan
lou
Sun, 2012-01-29 04:45
Richard
I like the theme of this poem, but there only seems to be one ripple, it really needs to be expanded, as it feels like the start of a poem.
lou
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Geezer
Sun, 2012-01-29 08:50
I sixth the notion...
that there should be more to this one! I do however relish the simplicity and completeness of thought here. ~ Gee
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wesley snow
Tue, 2012-01-31 21:28
I'm going to go against the flow...
... and say I liked its size. It is succinct to a fault. I like it as it is. wesley
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Ian.T
Fri, 2012-02-03 13:25
Damn
Wesley doesn't like making waves that's a first lol.
The waters fine come on in and make some waves.
Sorry just had to throw another pebble in the middle of the pond.
Never did see that film "On Golden Ponds" Did they make waves, Yours Sparrow, Yenti is laying down in a dark room La La
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