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Bare Hands

BARE HANDS

He who lives by the mark of an axe and the sound of a falling tree,
Or the squeal as the ironbark slowly splits, into fence posts yet to be,
And he who digs through the gibber stones or the clay that chokes the spade,
Or driving a line through deserted wastes knows how this land was made.

He who rides on a spirited horse enjoys when their will explores,
He'll ride in a frenzy on an open course but mourn till the mare wants more,
And he who toys with the savage dog is bitten I do expect,
But plays none-the-less till the wild beast falls and submits to the man's respect.

And these are the things which they said were gone,
Said belonged to the pioneers,
But this I say, that "they" are wrong, such trials still meet us here.
For this is the test of the spirit in man and the strength of his offspring true,
And such is the challenge of life and land,
Bare hands to pull us through.

He who has driven through virgin scrub in a bomb that barely fires,
Knows what it's like by the seat of his pants when the odds are mounting higher,
And he who takes on a mighty storm in a dingy half built for three,
Knows what it's like to feel the sting of a psychopathic sea.

He who faces a bush-fire's rage with potato sack alone,
Though the front is more than ten mile long, stands brave before his home,
For these are the things that test the glue when the hour of testing comes,
So I'll put my money on the honest few, from the land of the Southern Sons.

For out of the harsh rub of this land, a rugged music starts,
Whose beats are the ring of a swinging axe,
Whose notes are a thumping heart,
And the song they sing is a splendid scorn, of things that were and are,
To such is the Aussie Battler born like an isolated star.

And these are the things they said were gone and belonged to the pioneers,
But I'll say this, with the self-same scorn, these trials still call us here.
For this is the test of the spirit in man and the strength of his offspring true,
And such is the challenge of life and land, bare hands to pull us through.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
I am an Australian writing about what it means to be Australian. I'm sure the poem will make sense to other cultures but its primarily aimed at Australians. We call a clapped out car a bomb and we fight bushfires with potato sacks there must be something to be said for such behavior but I'm not sure if I captured it. Thank you for reading it.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

One of the best I have read for many a year. Made me think of Kipling's 'THE LAND', Don't Know why but I had to go straight back and re read it. A powerful piece. Alex

Thank you for your kind comments. Now I am eager to read Kipling's The Land. I just digressed to read The Land. Its a marvelous piece of work very historical. I follow a different history. My roots go back to 1864 and the pioneers of this country. We do not have a history of Romans or Danes but there are a few in my family tree.

Thank you once again for the enlightenment.

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this makes sense to all those people that have had to do something with nothing. Anyone who reads this, will have a reaction that says, " Wow, that's amazing!" But most have not been subject to more than the occasional flat tire, run out of gas or "I can't find a damned parking spot", kind of emergency. Call AAA to fix that tire, bring some gas or circle the parking lot, until somebody leaves. Living on the frontier, with maybe a hundred miles between you and help, is a whole different kind of thing.
Good job in telling the tale of it. BTW, this is not free verse, it is structured western. ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thank you for your kind comments and insights. I was going to mark it as Western Structured but I was unsure. The life experiences I refer to in my poem are those at the "rock face" of our labor. I am sure there are a host of people in all countries that have to face hardship in their everyday existence. It just seems to be more prevalent here in outback Queensland due to vast distances and sparse population.
Thank you once again
Regards
Poets Hand

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Thank you Mark for your comments and insights. I can relate to your Northwest wind we have just the opposite in November/December we cop it from the South West straight from Antarctica. In a dinghy half built for three refers to a dinghy that does not measure up or is undersized for three persons, overcrowded and in the wind on a psychotic sea so stupidly dangerous but people still risk it.

Thank you once again
Regards Poets Hand

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This is beautifully scripted. Praiseable presentation of poetic expression. Excellent job!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Thank you for your assessment of my poem. Your words really lifted me and reinforced a feeling of accomplishment I have gained through these critiques.

Thank you once again
Best Regards
Poets Hand

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It’s absolutely astounding regardless of subject matter. It has a nice steady gallop to it. A lot of symbolism in the choice of style that add gravity to the words.

Nice job,
Tim

Dear Tim, Thank you for your critique of my poem. I just visited one of your sites and listened to a preview of your music. You are so talented, I am ambushed by your expertise. I value the comments you made about my poem. I wrote it attempting to capture a uniquely Australian style. This galloping meter is used widely in Australian Bush Poetry which I hope to emulate. If anybody knows something about poetry and song I bet you do.

Thank you once again. Best Regards
Hannah Orion

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hello again! I see that you are thriving, spinning marvelous tales of hard truth and winning friends. it is very good to see! I much enjoyed your poem of action, adventure and hard work. I know what it is like to suffocate a grass fire with a wet potato sack. of course, I was the one to set the fire off. I was tending to the fire in a trashcan in my own back yard. day dreaming as usual, when it spilled over onto the grass, getting away from me. the fire department came and scooted me out of the way, so they could deal with the fire properly, lol. these are my favorite lines of your poem:

For out of the harsh rub of this land, a rugged music starts,
Whose beats are the ring of a swinging axe,
Whose notes are a thumping heart,
And the song they sing is a splendid scorn, of things that were and are,
To such is the Aussie Battler born like an isolated star.

*hugs & respect, Cat

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And reply in kind, thanks.

Once again I thank you for the kind words you wrote to me and your critique of my poem.

Somewhere in my world
was lost in stare
Like Endimion
In dreams
was
I

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