The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses repetition to create a sense of dialogue between the speaker and a higher power. The repeated phrase "Are you there God?" serves as a refrain, anchoring the poem and providing a consistent structure. This technique also emphasizes the speaker's ongoing questioning and search for understanding.

The poem explores a range of emotions and experiences, from gratitude and trust to doubt, anger, and despair. This emotional arc is well developed, with each stanza contributing to the speaker's evolving relationship with God. The use of specific, personal details helps to make this journey feel real and relatable.

However, the poem could benefit from more varied and vivid language. Many of the descriptions and expressions are quite straightforward, which can make the poem feel somewhat flat. Experimenting with more metaphorical or symbolic language could help to deepen the emotional impact and add another layer of meaning.

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For example, the speaker often states their feelings directly ("I’m kind of mad at you", "I’m sorry for doubting you") rather than conveying them through imagery or action. This can make the poem feel more like a diary entry than a piece of poetry. Incorporating more show-don't-tell techniques could make the poem more engaging and evocative.

Finally, the poem could benefit from a clearer resolution. The final stanza suggests a shift in the speaker's perspective, but it's not entirely clear what this shift entails or what it means for the speaker. Providing a more definitive conclusion could help to bring the poem full circle and give the reader a stronger sense of closure.

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I liked this, if that is the correct way of looking at it. Certainly very interesting. On a personal note all I would say is live your life as best you can then it doesn't matter whether he is there or not. Alex

from Alex. If you live the best way that you can, it doesn't matter if there is a god or not. Having faith in something is most often because of the way things happen time after time. If it always happens the same way, then you should have faith in it.
Simple. A lot of times, things don't happen the way we would like them to; then it is up to us to change the way that they happen. Live by the "Golden Rule" and you can have confidence that you are living right. I felt this piece clearly, and I saw your intent. I think you did alright. ~ Geezer.
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Hello!
The title immediately drew me in, having thought of Judy Blume's novel. Many raw and interesting thoughts here, lending to a deeper, personal meaning in the title. I enjoyed reading this. I liked its progression. I wonder if there is a way to tighten it up, think of what is absolutely necessary in each segment that will show the feeling / meaning instead of the need to explain.
Thank you,
Lavender

from Lavender, try to rid some of those lines of the extra and unnecessary words. ~ Geez.
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