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Angel

Submitted by Patricia on Mon, 2024-07-01 01:59

I see you there glowing,

like an angel in a darkened sky,

gentle as I ever seen.

I bow my head before your eyes.

But alas, you are sleeping,

And your eyes are closed.

It’s just a figment of my imagination,

you were there you really were.

I see no sense in what you are.

To me you are the most wonderful creature,

and maybe you truly are an angel,

sent from God to guide me.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - draft

Contest:

07/24 Falling For My Therapist

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Alex Tanner

Mon, 2024-07-01 07:06

Hello

I liked this immensely, a nice soft read. A possible typo. Did you mean 'gentle' where you have 'gentile'? Alex.

Patricia

Mon, 2024-07-01 07:20

Thank you

Thank you very much,
Pat

author comment

Geezer

Mon, 2024-07-01 09:58

I would choose...

to present this just a little differently, like so:

gentle as [I've] ever seen.

But your eyes are closed
you are sleeping.

comma: "you were there, you really were."

Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
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Patricia

Mon, 2024-07-01 18:14

Angel

Thank you for the critique and kind words.
Pat

author comment

Clentin

Tue, 2024-07-02 15:16

Nice poem, reflects the

Nice poem, reflects the calmness of a guiding light

Mark

Tue, 2024-07-02 21:55

Soft, Nice, Calmness

What a mello poem.
I feel so mello.
Love ya,

Mark
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