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An Act of Bravery
An act of bravery
Is painting with every colour that is in your soul
Splashing life on your canvas
Honouring emotions
With no thought of what others will think of your creation
Not TRYING to make it meaningful
Modern, pretty
Commercially viable
ACCEPTABLE
Just bursting out into the greater you
With total trust
An act of bravery
Is living your life through yourself
As yourself
Creating, expanding
UNAPOLOGETIC
Infusing your joy into everyone
Spreading colour and light
And letting any judgement of you wash away
Like water soluble paint in the rain
Fading and then disappearing completely
Leaving no trace of a blemish
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Mon, 2024-01-15 04:40
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Geezer
Mon, 2024-01-15 13:06
Hello Lindsay...
It's so nice to see you back writing after your hiatus, we have missed you.
I hope that you have been well and that you will continue to write and post here.
make sure that you enter this poem in the monthly challenge. Nice stuff. ~ Geezer.
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Lindsay
Mon, 2024-01-15 18:35
Hi Geezer
thanks for the welcome back!
author commentAlex Tanner
Tue, 2024-01-16 10:15
I liked
I like this Lindsay, only one complaint and this applies to so many. No punctuation. Alex.
Lindsay
Tue, 2024-01-16 17:24
Hi Alex and thanks for your comment
Thanks for commenting Alex.
Do you mean comma's at the end of each line?
Other than that, I felt I put everything I wanted to in, to read how I wanted it to read.
Would be interested in what you meant.
Thanks so much!
Lindsay
author commentAlex Tanner
Tue, 2024-01-16 18:42
Example
Hello Lindsay. If you are happy with how it reads that is fine but I will give you one example. At the end of the line that reads
''with every colour that is in your soul'' i think you should have a comma or a semi-colon. Punctuation helps break lines up, it can add intensity and meaning. Read it to yourself again, several times, aloud and see where you pause to get a dramatic effect. I think you can get a lot more power with what you have written. Alex
Lindsay
Wed, 2024-01-17 05:24
Query
I thought that by ending the line, that was like a pause, but I could be wrong?!
I kind of end the line for a pause, and put one word on a line if I feel it needs to stand out, but am very happy to learn how it should be done as I am a total amateur, so thanks for your input.
author commentTawny023
Sun, 2024-01-21 05:18
Powerful
Every person, creative, and artists can concur with every line. At the end of the day life is free, it’s freeing us to be creative, and with it freedom trumps all else. If this is bravery then sign me up? Amazing and Speaks to my soul.