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390 And say goodbye

I have forgotten the willow weeping in the field
How it brushed closely to the Earth
As the sunshine would glimmer through
Highlighting the wild flowers in bloom
Home to the sparrow and once a year
The turtle dove would tour through its branches.

I remember the golden sunset
It would paint the sky with purple, reds and oranges
Majestic upon the encroaching night
In breathless awe I would watch
As the clouds explode like rainbows
And the calm of the moment breeched serenity.

I can picture two hands
The gentle embrace of two lovers
Walking the sandy shores near the ocean
And the sun would caress the waves
With shimmering dance
As the winds would part, circling
Embracing the beauty of love.

And I can remember tears
Suffering, how it can encompass us
Burdening even the most willful soul
Stripping away beauty and desire
Leaving only the tear stained pillow
And the decision to say goodbye.

It is to not, the passing
Every day the blind eye escapes to see
The beauty within the life
The nature within the beauty
And when death takes trespass upon us
We take back the glimpses forgotten
And say goodbye.

By: Darren J McMurray
March 22, 2012

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Comments

Firstly a great welcome to Neopoet site....
This work is very good, the loss of so much in the first Stanza then the memory kicks in to remember other things, though I would have loved the memory to remember those things in the first part also, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

How nicely put together, smooth and evenly moving, the content left me longing to stay. It's hard to choose a favorite part as it all just flowed so nicely.

Thank You
Tommi

Tommi Cordial

Dawn breaks over marble head...

The poem was my feeling of loss icurred by a friends suicide, hence the title and last line. I tried to express this as the last thoughts before that final decision.

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