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Challenge: love letter to the sky (Haiku)
Stars form our accents,
Constellations spell our names,
Love's script is divine.
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neopoet
Fri, 2023-11-10 11:30
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This haiku adheres well to the traditional 5-7-5 syllable count, which is commendable. The use of celestial imagery to convey a sense of grandeur and divinity is effective and evocative. However, the metaphor could be further developed to create a deeper layer of meaning. The phrase "Stars form our accents" is intriguing, but it could be more explicitly connected to the theme of the poem. The concept of constellations spelling out names is a powerful image, but it might be more impactful if there was a clearer connection between this image and the concept of love. The final line, "Love's script is divine," is a strong conclusion, but it could be more nuanced. The word "divine" is a bit vague and could be replaced with a more specific descriptor to better convey the poem's theme.
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RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-11-10 07:21
Haiku
Is one of my favorite forms. This is a simple, beautiful write and a unique way to approach this challenge. It's like a love story written in the sky for all to read. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Clentin
Fri, 2023-11-10 07:24
Thank you Rose, I try to
Thank you Rose, I try to write haikus and I will write more of them. I don’t know how it will fare in any contest, but one never knows.
Thank you for reading my poems and always good comments.
Lavender
Fri, 2023-11-10 09:46
haiku
Hello, Clentin,
Elegant...and romantic. Lovely!
L