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kid man!
Do you all know,
one day yet
to one's birthday
one is a child
and
a day after the 18th birthday
one becomes a man(woman)
now tell me
a crime committed on a day
short of 18
one is dealt with
like one was a kid
and
a day after he cuts the eighteenth slice
he becomes a man
then what is his position
as he cuts the cake
and
pierces his ex
will you treat him
as a man
o tell me
fair man!
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Seren
Thu, 2014-01-30 08:50
Loved
If he's cutting the cake he's already there, in my world we don't cut cakes until we are that age so he would be a man in my eyes,
I get the feeling that this was a comment am I right ?
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Thu, 2014-01-30 09:15
no just a wild thought
a legal interpretation of sorts
asked by a fan
from across
thanks
loved
Seren
Thu, 2014-01-30 09:18
Aren't a lot of poems wild
Aren't a lot of poems wild thoughts? smile
JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Thu, 2014-01-30 12:13
Mostly
aren't most poets wild?
smiles to u too!
loved
Seren
Fri, 2014-01-31 08:33
Even bigger smile, I was a
Even bigger smile, I was a wild child once upon a time.
love JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Fri, 2014-01-31 10:03
I an still
even now a
WILDERNESS
CHILD
loved