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ROSE
ROSE
The thorns pierce
The Rose
and it bleeds
betrayed
by its own nature
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Ian.T
Sun, 2013-03-24 12:21
Joe
I have written the piece as a Senyru, and it has come out good..
Your theme is excellent to perceive that the rose would pierce its own flesh, or betray its self with its own defence system, I will PM it to you as it looks like an intrusion on the stream, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Geremia
Sun, 2013-03-24 12:27
I tried the minimilist
I tried the minimilist approach, Thanks, Ian.
loved
Sun, 2013-03-24 13:53
a sad depiction of the beauty
a sad depiction of the beauty
of a rose
it's the only flower
which never dies
nor bleeds
but rends hearts
to bleed in love.
loved
Geremia
Sun, 2013-03-24 14:58
We all are as fragile.
We all are as fragile.
Kailashana2
Sun, 2013-03-24 14:29
The fragility of the rose
The fragility of the rose rests in its thorns. A universal theme, we each capture in our own way, in due time.
Nice, Joe.
~A
Geremia
Sun, 2013-03-24 14:56
Yes, my Anna. We each are the
Yes, my Anna. We each are the Rose.
Kailashana2
Sun, 2013-03-24 15:28
Yup, dear Joe!
Yup, dear Joe!
I'm reminded of *thorns have roses*. Some days--it's just like that. :-)
Love.
Rula
Sun, 2013-03-24 16:10
hi joe
I know what is this about but can't see much logic in your imagery.
May be i'm missing something
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Geremia
Sun, 2013-03-24 17:35
The human body turns onitself
The human body turns onitself, we become ill, and die. Thatis Nature's way. That is the "way of the Rose.""
Geremia
Sun, 2013-03-24 17:35
The human body turns onitself
The human body turns onitself, we become ill, and die. Thatis Nature's way. That is the "way of the Rose.""
loved
Sun, 2013-03-24 18:38
this is an universal law
this is an universal law
birth, life and death
applies to lilies equally….
but the only flower that survives
in pages of history,
on the shelves of time
in libraries
is a lovely rose only
a rose,
from buttons on coats,
to biers
it’s the most sought out flower…
hence give due merit to me,
there is yet to be a rose born
like Lovedly
loved
Geremia
Sun, 2013-03-24 19:30
yes, well and beautifully
yes, well and beautifully expressed.
joe
loved
Sun, 2013-03-24 20:55
thank you for your
appreciation
which is so dear for me
loved