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Already Old
Over coffee that morning
we both smiled. Remembering
when we first met
we were both already old.
But we were free
from the awkwardness
of first encounters with love.
At the time, we didn't know
we would share in the sun
the rest of our shadows together.
Style / type:
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments
scribbler
Fri, 2024-01-26 23:19
"sharing shadows" the best phrase I've read in a year
or maybe more lol
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2024-01-29 10:52
Thank you Scrib! Best
Thank you Scrib!
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Fri, 2024-01-26 23:39
Already Old
Hello, Michael,
I agree with Stan - that line is great.
L
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2024-01-29 10:52
LOL! I liked it too L - thank
LOL! I liked it too L - thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Mon, 2024-01-29 11:03
Hello, Michael,
Sometimes I get excited and go on and on about a poem that I really love. I wanted to offer how "shadows" feels to me here. Not only the shadows of the golden years, but it also feels like it's reflecting on their individual experiences being peacefully left in the past. Anyhoo...
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2024-01-29 11:19
Very kind L! Your comments
Very kind L! Your comments are exactly what I was trying to convey - thank you for sharing!
Best
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Sat, 2024-01-27 18:06
and I agree...
with all of the above!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2024-01-29 10:53
Appreciate the visit Cat -
Appreciate the visit Cat - thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony
Tawny023
Mon, 2024-01-29 11:09
Really nice
A very cool perspective of sharing it all in love
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2024-01-29 11:22
Thanks for stopping by Tawny,
Thanks for stopping by Tawny, and glad you liked the piece!
Best
Michael Anthony
Ruby Lord
Tue, 2024-01-30 07:06
This has a gentle and lovely
This has a gentle and lovely feel about it. An enjoyable and thought provoking poem that I read more than a few times. I applied it to myself as a younger person and read it again as an older one. Your words made me look to my past and my present. Well done, Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.