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In Another Life I Live Bravely
I want to live in the tallest apartment in New
York City, and peer my gaping eyes through
my window to see only dancing beetles below.
I will wear expensive feathers and furs, I’ll
dance with strangers, and I’ll party for a while
with headliners after sold-out shows.
I’ll walk the streets wearing only perfume and
watch men stand agape as I strut past, too awed
at my nakedness proud and aglow.
I’ll rebel and I’ll wail and I’ll cry out,
“Change will come! Justice will prevail!”
And I won’t shut up until Change comes and goes.
I’ll play poker with CEO’s, and kiss strange men in taxis,
and spin through the nights like a globe on its axis;
to live with honeyed hi’s! And never with lows.
I’ll do pilates and yoga, drink only red wine,
and I won’t dwell on the men who used to be mine.
I’ll live fast and so furiously young,
and I’ll die gentle, soft and divine.
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Thu, 2024-01-18 05:50
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2024-01-18 08:52
hello MM,
I love the whole poem, but, these lines stand out to me:
I’ll do pilates and yoga, drink only red wine,
and I won’t dwell on the men who used to be mine.
I’ll live fast and furiously young, and I’ll die gentle, soft and slow.
*hugs, Cat
p.s. you might try proof reading as some words are misspelled.
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MermaidMaster
Thu, 2024-01-18 10:52
hi cat!!
hi cat!!
thank you for commenting!! im glad you enjoyed!
what words were mispelled? I read through a few times and couldn’t find anything.
<3
Candlewitch
Thu, 2024-01-18 10:57
hi,
this line:
to live with honeyed (hi’s!) And never with lows.
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MermaidMaster
Thu, 2024-01-18 13:01
hi cat!
hi cat!
thanks for explaining!
that was meant to be a play on words with hi (the greeting) and high.
i appreciate your feedback!!
<3
Candlewitch
Fri, 2024-01-19 14:39
Hello MM,
thanks for the explanation, now I understand, lol, I get it. mush brain me. *love, Cat
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Lavender
Fri, 2024-01-19 10:12
In Another Life
Hello, MM!
Interesting concept! I can feel your enthusiasm and zest! Brought a big smile to my face!
L
MermaidMaster
Mon, 2024-01-22 10:52
Hi Lavender!!
Hi Lavender!!
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! It made my day :)
<3
Tawny023
Sun, 2024-01-21 04:40
Bold words
Beautifully captures the feminine wilds and it’s liberation.
MermaidMaster
Mon, 2024-01-22 10:52
Hi Tawny!
Hi Tawny!
Thank you so much for your comment! I really appreciate it I’m so glad I was able to capture the wild feminine side.
<3
kowque
Fri, 2024-07-12 23:40
This poem
Makes me want to buy a fur coat in summer
Hehehe it's so brilliant
Koki