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Seeing Red
You, the fire, immersed in burning it all
with the heat of a blue-white flame
aimed at my good intentions.
There was no comfort there.
Where love was sought
I found wolves at the door.
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Remebering a red-haired girl from a long time ago...
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RoseBlack
Sun, 2023-09-03 10:41
Short and Powerful
There was a lot of emotion in these two stanzas as well as descriptive language. I am sensing you reached out to someone only to have them greet you harshly and not at all in the way you expected. This resonates. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-09-03 15:28
Thanks for stopping by RB and
Thanks for stopping by RB and sharing your thoughts. Yes, this was memory from a fairly toxic relationship years ago. Wished her well and we both moved on. For myself, much for the better. Her? I have no idea...
Michael Anthony