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Unrequited
Let me gather my thoughts...
they drift around me like
fallen leaves before the rain,
like flyaway cottonwood
stirred by my wandering feet.
I scatter each thought of you
with every bewildered step.
Let me gather my thoughts...
You are in my sunlight.
You are in my silence.
You are in my music,
my poetry,
my rain.
If there could ever be a day
with no thought of you,
I would somehow
miss you still.
***
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2022-09-11 05:42
Yeah
I love it. It’s so inviting. No corrections or suggestions, I just love it.
Tim
Lavender
Sun, 2022-09-11 12:58
Hi, Tim,
Thank you for reading. Your comments mean a lot to me!
L
Geezer
Sun, 2022-09-11 12:53
Absolutely...
How I wish that I had written this! It says everything that one might say to the love of their life. Not a single word out of place.
~ Geez.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Lavender
Sun, 2022-09-11 13:00
Hello, Geezer,
I find that love is the hardest subject to write about. I'm glad you like this!
Thank you!
L
Geezer
Sun, 2022-09-11 13:17
Love is hardly...
hard to write about when writing from the mind of a poet such as yourself, who uses the pen as a conduit for emotions buried
and hidden. ~ Geez.
.
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Lavender
Sun, 2022-09-11 13:26
Dear Geez,
Thank you...
L
lovedly
Mon, 2022-09-12 21:34
this para does suffice unrequital love still...
If there could ever be a day
with no thought of you,
I would somehow
miss you still.
nicely slapped......
Lavender
Tue, 2022-09-13 05:13
Hi, Lovedly,
Thank you very much!
L
lovedly
Tue, 2022-09-13 12:57
I like poems but
minuscule they must convey................one's mood
Lavender
Tue, 2022-09-13 14:17
Hi, Lovedly,
I believe I understand what you mean...
L
Lavender
Tue, 2022-09-13 14:19
Hello, Mark,
Thank you for reading and your generous comment. I appreciate it!
L