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Getting There
I felt fortunate to arrive here
with the experience of many trips around our sun
I was missing some pieces though
In this place, I have my collection
of the departed, those I miss dearly
All that they were
and all they would ever be,
revisited over and over
in the realm of grief
But grief has a better purpose,
though it takes its' time to reveal itself
Ambling through my emotions, as it will
Accompanying me on a journey to acceptance
Teaching me to tend to my own heart
without those who are no longer here
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2022-07-20 21:02
Title is good
Good poem. Rings true. The title: really interesting choice. On the journey of life there’s only getting there. Goals but no finish line.
Great job,
Tim
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2022-07-24 11:14
Goals but no finish line -
Goals but no finish line - exactly! Thanks RA.
Best
Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-21 07:50
dear Michael,
how many holes can a heart sustain before it shreds into fragments? before it cannot go on? if you know the answer to that question, I'd appreciate you sharing it with me. my heart resembles Swiss cheese. Jess(my beloved elf) Ian, Moonman etc. I miss them terribly. good poem.
*hugs, Cat
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2022-07-24 11:18
Sadly, I cannot give you the
Sadly, I cannot give you the answers to your questions. All I can do is offer this modest poem. Great questions though, and many of us are still doing the rearch for answers ; ) Glad you enjoyed this - thank you!
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Thu, 2022-07-21 21:07
Getting There
Greetings, Michael!
Your title seems perfect for your poem. I love the transition from feeling fortunate, yet aware that something was missing. Grief, though it is horrible, seems to open our hearts to the purest form of acceptance of our own mortality, and the greatest level of gratitude for those we lost. The way you described grief as in a realm is wonderful - it has so many layers and sensations. "Getting There" is definitely about figuring out how to tend to our own hearts, though I'm not certain we ever truly arrive. The ending may feel a bit lonely, but I do sense there is also a spark of hope. Beautiful.
Thank you!
Lavender
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2022-07-24 11:21
I enjoyed reading your
I enjoyed reading your thoughts on this piece L, and THANK YOU for sharing them! I'm glad you liked it.
Best
Michael Anthony