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Sway

I’m tired of my regrets
rattling their chains around mockingly
People who never said goodbye
and things I could have done better

Like gaudy pieces of costume jewelry
the laments hang around my neck
baubles with no value I can see

The fake diamonds sparkle too
Drawing my attention away
as they seek to cause a distraction
from an elusive calmness

If I leave the bandages in place
firmly affixed as they are,
to cover the guilt and remorse
in all their varied hues,
the blue, the red, and the black,
I know I would fool some
but not those I call friend

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Last few words: 
With the last stanza, I was trying to convey that our regrets and imperfections are understood and accepted by our true friends. Wrestled quite a bit with this stanza. Not sure I pulled it off to my liking...
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

Well I don't regret reading this lol. Line 15 try hues instead of colors and see if you like it better. A lot of motives quality in this poem

I like that Geez! Thanks!

Michael Anthony

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