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May In April

Lightning flashes across rattled panes, Indigo films on clover leaves,
Purple rain.
Chicks retreat to higher grounds, Metal birds cling onto hangars. Downtown,
Whispering palms bath in the silver moon's luminous light,
Orion hangs like a chandelier in its stead on a starry sky,
Barefooted generators run into the night,
Words find their feet, spring up and fly, Feelings lit up a page like fire-flies; They are bright enough to make hearts glow,
I throw a pebble down the stream's shallow end for rivers run deep.

Cellphones berth at power banks,
Emails dispatches through port,
Furnace forged piece to adorn minds,
Lyrical lines hound rhymes behind bars,
Metaphorical flow waters flowery verses,
Panegyric penned for you, talk goddess:
Armed with subtle humor, 'taste bud like' candor and truth as body armor,
You mount the airwaves like an amazon: 'wit', no airs.
I doff my 'heart' for your charm; it hold hands with nature.
Your honey laden voice stirs the tea kettle to whistle: so sultry, it leaves hickey on (my) ear lobes
Sweet with such splendor.

Google for dreamy eyes,
Windows for streaming live,
I conjure constellations of you up in my silky sky: connecting dots by drawing lines.
Fortnightly, Tauruean queen,
Have had your thoughts tattooed on my muse's mind.
To say 'fancy' is to say the least: making light of it,
So, before the torrents of love starts trickling in;
Let me beat the second's hand to the wishing well,
Make my wish under the auspices of this shooting star, as these curtain clouds scud pass...
With a fairy wand in hand, I say,
" More wind to your wings, Talk Goddess.!"

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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this piece is about a female DJ or talk-show host on the radio. I can't figure the correlation of the title to the story.
Your language use is pretty fair, however, some of the lines did not connect for me. The pace was fine and rambled right along. It kind of reminds me of a story that I heard, but I can't remember where.
As to the beginning and the end, I like the thought that you might be listening to her radio-show at the beginning of a storm and feeling comforted at the end. ~ Geezer.
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You are spot on, it was dedicated to a British talk-show host who was in my country at the time, the choice of title is a reflection of happenings around the time(2019) if I remember correctly, Theresa May lost a Brexit vote in April, and the subject of this poem had some sort of remarkable event in April that year. thanks for your comments.

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After reading your back catalogue, I can't help but wonder where you've been since 2012, what wonderful occurrences has happened to you to promote such a change of style.

Loved it mate.

Obi.

I actually went to check your profile to see where you are from because your name is a Eastern Nigerian word for King, I liked that you enjoyed the poem, I stopped writing around 2012, Life happens !

I read your write ups too, an old soul, I must say.

Thank you for your comment!

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